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FIC - Lily of the Hollow Changing Seasons fic for lunalovepotter

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Apr. 3rd, 2008 | 11:49 am
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And here is the final section.

Written for lunalovepotter for flyingcarpet's Changing Seasons.




Title: Lily of the Hollow
Rating: NC-17
Words: 4660
A/N: DH, but not Epilogue compliant. I really don't care for some of JKR's pairings that she has come up with in follow-up interviews.
Warnings: Strong sexual content. Note: There is frank sexual banter and inappropriate behavior between underaged individuals. However, all explicit sexual situations involve characters that are 'of age.' Any sexual intercourse between minors is only referred to or takes place 'off stage.' Lily's behavior in this part is really inappropriate, but hopefully not over the line.
Disclaimer: All recognizable characters and locations are the property of JK Rowling. This is a work of adult fiction and is not intended to promote or condone the activities depicted herein.


I also wanted to thank inell for allowing me to reference some of the pariings she created in her wonderful series 'Worth the Risk,' especially Teddy and Hermione.


PART V -- AUTUMN

“Hold still, James,” Lily groused, “or, I swear, I’ll strangle you with this bloody tie.”

Lily was retying the bow tie of James’ tux. She was forced to admit that her oldest brother cut quite a handsome figure.

“Never thought you’d clean up so nice,” she sniggered. “You and Arabella are being careful, aren’t you?”

“Careful about what, Lily?” James asked with a straight face.

“Have you told Mum and Dad about you two yet?” she persisted.

“Told them what?”

“That you’ve shagged each other a dozen times?” Lily smirked.

“Lily!” James paled. “Not so loud!”

“It’s not like half the school isn’t aware of it by now,” Lily said with a wry smile. “You might have chosen a less indiscrete witch to be rolling your leg over, you know.”

James actually blushed just a little, but smiled and said, “When you’re good, the world needs to know.”

She punched him in the stomach. He grunted a bit - Lily was very strong - but his abs were like stone.

“Is Julian getting lucky?” he asked.

“James!” Lily cried, her face flushing. “Please! Don’t...don’t tease me about that. You...you know how...how confused I’ve been about things.”

James pulled his sister into a warm, brotherly hug. “Sorry, Lily. If he does anything you don’t like, let me know and I’ll bash him up for you.”

“I’m perfectly capable of taking care of myself, James,” his sister reminded him.

“Well, that slapper dress you’re wearing might give him ideas,” James smirked as he pinched his sister’s shapely posterior.

Lily snorted , slapping his hand away, but knew her gown was quite alluring, especially on her lithe, trim, athletic figure. It came just to mid-thigh, shimmered with Gryffindor red and Ravenclaw blue tones, and clung to her body like a second skin. Her mother had been very hesitant about letting her buy it, but Lily had finally whined and pouted her into acceptance.

“If Arabella’s was any shorter,” she jibed, “every guy at the Ball would be able to see just exactly what it is about her that you like so much.” James made a face at her.

“You are being careful, right?” she asked again.

“Of course,” James said. “She’s on ‘The Potion,’ but we say the charm as well.”

James had deflowered Arabella last May, after the Ravenclaw-Gryffindor Quidditch match. They had gotten together several times over the summer, even once in James’ own bed, and had found the time and opportunity to be intimate another three times so far in the current school term.

“Is it true about Rose and Scorpius?” James asked.

“You’ll see at the Ball,” Lily temporized. “Actually, even if it is, it will soon be forgotten when Eddy shows up!”

James snickered over that. Eddy Lovegood had somehow convinced BOTH of Scorpius’ younger twin sisters to go with him. Ariadne and Phaedra Malfoy were a pair of startlingly beautiful, blond third-years and were both quite enthralled with Eddy, much to Scorpius’, and many other Slytherin wizards’, displeasure.

Eidulophilius Lovegood’s sorting to Slytherin had been totally unexpected, but he absolutely reveled in the tense, fiercely competitive atmosphere, easily holding his own against Scorpius and his many clients. As had been true with his father, Draco, much of Slytherin was beholding to the Malfoys and, therefore, dominated by Scorpius. The fact that his sisters constantly defied him in regards to their relationship with the handsome and personable Lovegood grated on him, but he knew he couldn’t risk an open conflict with Eddy - he was much too talented and had absolutely no fear of the young Malfoy.

“Well,” Lily said, making the final adjustment to James’ tie, “it will have to do. I still can’t believe Mum and Dad are chaperons tonight. It really galls me. They’re only doing it because of me!”

When Harry and Ginny had owled their children that they were going to be chaperons at the Halloween Ball, Lily had sent an angry reply asking why they had to spy on her and Julian and didn’t they trust her judgment?

Her mother had written her back, inquiring rather harshly what Lily was planning on doing with Julian that would make it necessary for them to spy on her?

The letter continued, “Minerva asked if we would mind being chaperons. It’s been years since either of us have been at Hogwarts for more than an hour or two. Of course we trust you, Lily, and we have no intention of ‘spying’ on you, anymore than we do on your brothers.”

Lily still didn’t believe it, but there wasn’t anything she could do about it now.

“If Rose and Scorpius are together,” James asked as he opened the portrait for his sister, “how long do you think it will take Uncle Ron to get here and hex Scorpius into oblivion?”

“Let’s see,” Lily snickered. “It takes an owl about two hours to get to London. He’ll go to Hermione first and try to get her to come along, that’ll take half an hour. Then ten minutes to run up here from Hogsmeade after he apparates there.”

Julian was waiting at the bottom of the steps. He smiled and gasped at Lily’s dress, and leaning over, gave her a warm kiss, which she returned.

“Watch your hands, Corner,” James growled with a smile. “That’s my baby sister’s bum you’re trying to fondle.”

“I’ll give you a baby sister’s bum,” Lily snorted. “Go pick up your Slytherin sweetie. You know Mum and Dad are going to disown you for dating her.”

As James left, Julian kissed Lily again, murmuring, “You’re really striking, Lily, you really are. That dress looks just fabulous on you.”

Lily smiled and blushed just a little.

“That’s very sweet, Julian, thank you,” she smiled. “I...I’m just not sure what I’m going to feel like...like doing after the Ball. Be...be nice to me, please? I’m sorry I’m being so...so, I don’t know. I’m only thirteen, Julian.”

He offered her his arm, saying softly, “I had no intentions of trying anything, Lily, really. I won’t say I’m not tempted, you really do look smashing, you know that.”

Lily felt reassured. She knew Julian was experienced with witches, but all his lovers said he was a true gentleman.

They arrived at the entrance of the Great Hall, meeting up with Albus and his date, Miranda MacMillan, a sixth-year Hufflepuff. Miranda was a handsome blond, and was actually quite thrilled that a Quidditch star like Albus had asked her to the Ball, even though he was only a fourth-year. Lily felt it quite likely that Miranda would allow Albus a fair amount of access to her shapely body during the post-Ball snogging, but knew Albus wouldn’t be getting as lucky as he hoped to.

Albus was not the witch’s wizard that James or Eddy were, but he had a certain quiet charm. His shy smile and ‘innocent,’ deep green eyes often had young witches shivering with lustful thoughts and forbidden desires. However, he wasn’t driven like James was, whose primary goal as a Quidditch star was enticing witches into his arms, and, if possible, his bed.

He had succeeded with Arabella Goyle. Lily smiled as the couple joined them at the door. Arabella’s skirt barely covered the essentials, and the way she hung on James’ arm and the looks they were sharing, made it obvious to Lily that they’d be shagging in a broom cupboard before midnight.

Lakme Thomas showed up in a stunning sari-like robe on the arm of Miranda’s twin brother, Jonathan. Lily was well aware of the fact that the two of them were already lovers, and had been for nearly nine months.

Lily felt the heat pooling in her center and a quiver in her thighs. So many of her friends and acquaintances seemed to have already been intimate with someone. She looked at Julian, so tall and handsome, and also well experienced. She knew any number of witches were truly upset that she was with him, and her only a second-year.

“I can’t, I can’t, I can’t,” she repeated over and over in her mind. “I’m only thirteen. I can’t!”

Lily took Julian over to her parents. Harry shook his hand, her mother offered her cheek for a kiss.

“You make a lovely couple,” her mother smiled. “Do have a good time.”

They greeted her brothers and their dates. Lily noticed Ginny’s brow furrowing a bit at Arabella’s rather immodest skirt, but she didn’t say anything. Her look, however, convinced Lily that James would be getting the third degree at Christmas. Once the truth came out, James was probably in for a very hard time with their parents.

About forty-five minutes into the dance, Rose and Scorpius made their appearance. The band was just back from a break, so the walked out to the center of the empty dance floor and held each other waiting for the music to start.

They danced very closely together. It took at least a minute before other couples started to join them, Lily pulling Julian out first.

As they danced near the edge of the floor, Lily’s parents motioned the couple over.

“Did you know?” Ginny asked.

“Yes,” Lily replied simply.

“And you didn’t tell us?” Ginny frowned.

“I’m not a snitch, Mum,” Lily answered angrily. “There is absolutely nothing wrong with them being together. The war ended twenty years ago!”

Harry quickly intervened, saying, “Gin, there’s no need to cause a scene. How long do you think it will be before your brother shows up?”

Ginny sighed. “Two, maybe two and a half hours. Let’s find Hagrid. We’ll need to be by the main doors to intercept him.”

Ginny looked at the young couple again, sighing with a small smile, “They make a fine-looking couple. I’m sorry I snapped at you, Lily. Forgive me, Julian.”

“I’m just as surprised, Mrs. Potter, I assure you,” Julian said. “Apparently hardly anyone else knew.”

Her parents headed towards the door, then suddenly stopped and stared, along with most of the rest of the people in the room.

Eddy Lovegood strutted through the door in an outrageous powder-blue tuxedo and a pink shirt. However, it was the two stunning blonds on his arms that were attracting most of the stares.

Ariadne and Phaedra Malfoy had the icy cold beauty of their mother, Astoria Greengrass, as well as their grandmother, Narcissa. Their personalities, however, were bubbly and fiery. They were dressed in low-cut, high-hemmed, complementary gowns of gold and silver lamé, that shimmered and shone like liquid metal and clung to their shapely bodies like a coat of paint. Lily was fairly certain neither was wearing any undergarments.

They added to the outrageousness by both dancing their first dance with Eddy, one in his arms and the other snuggled up against his back, with Eddy turning around halfway through.

Scorpius was livid, but held his tongue. Rose didn’t help his composure, trying and ultimately failing to hold in her rather loud sniggers. Lily smiled and poked Julian in the ribs, smirking, “It’s poor form to drool at other women when dancing with your date, you know.”

As her parents finally left to find Hagrid, Julian pulled Lily out into the Entrance Hall. “Would you like to find a little privacy and kiss a little?” he asked with a nigh irresistible leer.

Lily knew she should say no, but the highly-charged, seductive atmosphere of the dance had lowered her defenses. She nodded and they soon found themselves in a broom cupboard, Julian’s lips meshed with hers, his tongue torturing her mouth. She really enjoyed kissing. It felt so very nice and Julian was a real expert.

Everything seemed fine, but then she felt his right hand snaking under her hem and up the back of her thigh. She wasn’t going to say anything if he went no further, but then he cupped her half-naked buttocks and actually slipped a couple fingers under the waistband of her knickers.

She broke the kiss and pushed at him, weeping, “Julian! Don’t! Please! Don’t! DON’T!!”

He was red-faced and panting. “I...I’m sorry, I am. God, Lily, you’re just so...so damned sensual. I’m sorry, please, I am!”

“Go away,” she cried. “You promised! You promised you’d behave! Go!”

Julian heaved a sigh, muttering another sincere “I’m really sorry,” but Lily just shook her head and told him to go away.

Alone in the cupboard she let her tears flow, her mind racing, “I can’t let him, I can’t let anyone do that to me. Not now, not now. I’m only thirteen. I just can’t. If...if I let it go too far, I’ll do it, I know I will. I’m just too young, I am.”

Lily gasped as she heard the cupboard door open and someone come in. She couldn’t believe it when she heard her mother’s voice asking, “What...what do you think you’re doing, Harry? You...you can seriously want to...want to shag in a broom cupboard! Here? Are you bonkers?”

“Come on,” Harry urged, his hand snaking into her robe and fondling her firm, shapely breasts. “I never had a chance to do this with you when we were here. Haven’t you always wanted to shag in a broom cupboard?”

Ginny knew she should say no, but her husband’s smile was just too charming, and his hand had now slipped down into her knickers, grasping a firm, round cheek and pulling her hips tightly to his.

“You...you’re an incorrigible lecher, you know that, Potter,” Ginny gasped as Harry’s fingers drifted down between her legs and teased her now warm and wet lips. “We can’t be long, you know. We have to intercept Ron before he does anything rash.”

“We have time,” Harry said as he seized Ginny’s sweet lips in a searing kiss, opening his robes, then dropping his trousers and boxers. He backed his beautiful wife up against the door, and putting both hands under her bottom, lifted her up and stroked himself against the silk of her ‘barely there’ knickers.

Ginny whined and whimpered at the sensation, then reached down, and pulling the soaked fabric aside, guided Harry into her, gasping as his long, hard cock parted her soft flesh as he sank into her to his base. Harry hissed with pleasure as her tight, wet sheath engulfed him in its erotic, sensual grip.

Lily simply couldn’t believe she was watching her parents making love. Again! It was dark in the cupboard, of course, and she couldn’t see very well, but she clearly heard her parents’ gasps and grunts of pleasure and desire. She kept perfectly still and quiet, listening to the soft, liquid sounds of her father’s cock thrusting in and out of her mother. She could even smell their arousal in the close confines of the small enclosure.

They continued their lovemaking for another few minutes, Lily hardly daring to breathe. Her parents’ moans and hisses of pleasure grew louder and louder, her father’s thrusts sped up and started to become jerky, then Lily heard her mother gasp, “Almost...almost! Harry, God, Harry! Yes, almost, yes, yes, YES!!”

“Gin, Gin, GIN!” her father cried, his hips pistoning into her mother hard and fast as he came, keening with delight at the feeling of her pulsing around him as he spilled into her.

“Oh, God, God,” Harry panted, kissing her again and again. “Just amazing, fucking amazing, Gin. God, you get better every time, I swear you do.”

Lily could almost see her mother’s blush. She was certainly blushing, her cheeks felt like they were on fire.

“God, it...it was just brilliant, Harry,” Ginny moaned, her eyes glistening.

They stayed locked together for a couple more minutes, Harry whimpering as Ginny teasingly flexed herself around his still-hard cock.

“What would you say if McGonagall walked in on us now?” Ginny teased. “Or Filch?”

“That we were hunting for Dark wizards and got distracted,” Harry snorted.

Harry suddenly felt Ginny tense, then shiver slightly in his arms.

“I’m sorry, luv,” he said softly. “Something wrong?”

“No, not...not really,” she sighed, unhooking her legs from around his waist and lowering them to the floor. “It just occurred to me that I snogged both Michael and Dean in this same cupboard. Er, quite a bit in Michael’s case.”

“I so wish I’d been the one snogging you,” Harry murmured, kissing her softly. “Another thing I so hate him, Voldemort, for. Keeping me away from you. Fucking with my head so much that I didn’t recognize that you were the only witch for me.”

“I know, Harry,” Ginny sighed. “I so wanted you, but my pride wouldn’t let me beg. And after Hermione told me to get on with my life in the middle of my third year, I just...just...”

She sniffled a little, then continued, “I’ve never really told you just how intimate I was with Michael, Harry. I can’t believe some of the things I let myself do with him. His hands felt so good on me after...after...”

“After what?” Harry asked gently.

Ginny shivered again, then smiled, shook her head and continued, “I was only fourteen, but it just felt so, so wonderful. I just don’t know why I let myself do so much with him, let him....”

“You’re not telling me that you two actually...” Harry gasped.

“Of course not,” Ginny said. “You know I was a virgin that day at Muriel’s. Despite thinking that I’d never have you, you were always the one I wanted, Harry. You know that.”

Harry kissed his beautiful wife soft and long. Ginny whimpered with delight as his warm, wet tongue caressed her lips and cheeks, twisting and twining with hers.

She finally backed off the kiss, smiling, “Well, we’d best get outside and wait with Hagrid. It was just brilliant, Harry, so, so incredibly naughty! I wish they had these Balls more often!”

Lily heard her parents cast a couple cleansing spells, then straighten their clothes and after a final kiss, open the door and leave.

Lily shivered and shook, her tears flowing again as her fevered mind replayed all she had seen and heard.

“My mother snogged Julian’s father in this very closet!” she thought. “I just can’t believe that I was ten feet away from my parents while they shagged each other. Oh, God, it sounded so incredible. No, I can’t! I can’t! Why does this happen to me? I can’t! I’m only thirteen. But...but, Mum said she almost gave herself to Michael when she was only fourteen! I have to find out the truth. I need to find Julian. We have to talk, set our limits. I like him too much to push him away, but I can’t! I can’t make love to him, not at my age.”

Lily took several deep, calming breaths, then exited the cupboard. She made a quick detour to the girls’ loo to fix her makeup, then went and looked for Julian. She found him sitting dejectedly on a bench in the hallway.

She walked over, sat in his lap, put her arms around his neck and gave him a warm, lingering kiss.

Julian smiled as she backed off the kiss. “I’m so sorry, Lily,” he apologized softly and sincerely. “Really, really sorry. I promised. I...I shouldn’t have tried to...”

Lily kissed him again, then said softly, “It felt wonderful, Julian, it did. But, I just can’t let myself go like that. I’m only thirteen and I just can’t. I think making love to you would be the most fabulous experience I’d ever have - and I’m not ruling it out sometime in the future - but, not now. Let’s dance some more, then I’ll be happy to go out to the gardens and snog some more. I’ll put your hand where I want it, and, I promise, some of the places will be very nice.”

They went back into the Great Hall and danced for a couple more hours. Lily let him dance with the Malfoy twins as she danced with Eddy, giggling and slapping his hands when they would wander down and cup her shapely buttocks.

“I’ll Bat Bogey you, Eddy, don’t think I won’t!” she threatened with a grin. “You aren’t actually contemplating shagging the twins tonight, are you?”

Eddy smiled, stole a kiss from her. “Oh, I’m contemplating it, but it’s not going to happen. They said they might tell Scorpius tomorrow morning that it did, though, just to see his reaction. I think you’d better go rescue your date. Ari looks like she’s getting ready to straddle him in the middle of the dance floor.”

Lily gave Eddy another sweet kiss, pulled the clinging Ariadne off of Julian and led him to the gardens. She sat him down on a bench, then straddled him herself, pressing her warm center onto the suddenly large and somewhat uncomfortable bulge in his trousers as her dress rode up almost to her hips.

She took his hands and slid them up her thighs, telling him, “You...you can cup my cheeks, but you have to promise not to put your fingers inside my knickers, or...or between my legs. Promise?”

Julian nodded, then began whining with barely repressed lust at the feel of the smooth, warm skin of Lily’s half-naked, soft, firm buttocks under his fingers. He became painfully erect when her silk-covered pussy erotically pressed onto him and she began to softly circle her hips, driving him into a near frenzy.

“Lily, Lily,” he gasped after a couple minutes of her erotic dance. “If...if you don’t stop, I’m going to...”

“Do you want to?” she mewled, the pressure between her thighs becoming almost unbearable as she continued to stroke herself on the straining erection inside Julian’s trousers. “I think I’d like to. I’m sorry I won’t let you touch me there with your hands, but, oh, God, Julian, it...it feels so...so..., oh, God! Yes! YES!”

Lily’s lithe, nubile body shook with an orgasm, her first ever from anything other than her own fingers. She whimpered and mewled as the warm, sticky moisture pooled between her legs, thoroughly soaking her already damp knickers, then moaned more as she felt Julian’s body shake and spasm under her. His erection, despite being inside his trousers, stroked her trilling clit with a firm, erotic insistence, forcing several more hisses and gasps of pleasure from her. She looked around to see if anyone might have heard them, but all the visible couples were similarly distracted.

“Lily! Oh, Merlin, Lily! Gods and demons! Lily!” he groaned, his fingers digging into the soft, supple flesh of her arse. “I swear, that...that was more erotic than...than actually doing it! Oh, God! Lily!”

She stopped her hips’ motion, slowly crawled off Julian’s lap and sat next to him, leaning on his shoulder as they both panted while they recovered their breath. She looked up into his lust-filled eyes and smiled.

“I’m sorry to be such a tease,” she murmured. “It...it was amazing, brilliant, just earth-shattering! I’d like to...to continue to build our relationship up slowly, Julian. If...if you’re happy with that, I know I am.”

“That...that would be a dream come true, Lily,” Julian panted, blushing as he felt the wet spot in his crotch spreading.

“Well, we’d best clean ourselves up and get back to the dance,” Lily sighed, standing up and subtly casting a drying charm up her skirt, then smoothing it out. “Do you need help?”

Julian blushed and mumbled, “Umm, well, er, yeah. I haven’t, umm, come in my pants since I was ten.”

Lily giggled, stuck the tip of her wand into Julian’s waistband and murmured the drying spell.

He sucked in his breath, then gasped, “God! That...that felt, well, really weird. But a good weird.”

“You’re not angry at me for being such a tease?” Lily asked, her voice trembling slightly. “I simply am not ready for anything more intimate right now, Julian, I’m just not.”

“I’ve no right to be angry with you, Lily,” Julian told her, hugging her tightly. “It’s your body. Any access you let me have to it will be an unimaginable thrill, I’m certain.”

They danced a few more dances, then Julian walked her back to the Gryffindor tower. They kissed long and warm and deep for many minutes, their bodies pressed tightly together, surrounded by several other couples doing the same.

Up in the Gryffindor common room, Lily asked her brother, Albus, “Well, did you get lucky?”

Albus blushed, something James rarely, if ever, did. “No, Lily!” he huffed. “Er, I did get to explore some really nice, soft, warm, naughty bits, though.”

“Good for you,” Lily smiled, hugging him. “Phaedra appeared to have you rather excited there when you danced with her.”

“She’s like a wet dream come to life, I swear,” Albus sighed. “You don’t think Eddy is actually going to...”

“No, not tonight,” Lily said. “I’m more interested in what Rose will have to say tomorrow.”

In the Ravenclaw common room, Julian was sitting on a couch, recalling every second of the incredible experience in the garden with Lily. He swore to himself he would never touch her anywhere or in any way that she didn’t tell him he could. She was just too amazing to risk losing by being overanxious. Her promise to continue to ‘build their relationship’ was making him hard again just thinking about the possibilities inherent in that simple statement.

He looked up as Rose Weasley came in, her lipstick smeared and her hair rather disheveled. She saw him watching her, smiled and sat down next to him, actually leaning her head on his shoulder.

“Like to talk about it?” Julian asked with his best friendly leer.

“I will, with Lily,” she sighed. “You two were in the garden a long time. Oh, and I really enjoyed our dance together, Julian, you’re a fabulous dancer.”

“You’re welcome,” he said, putting a friendly arm around her. “You’re a most delightful armful, Ms. Weasley.”

Rose snuggled into him, she felt totally safe and secure with Julian.

“We kissed. A lot. And rubbed against each other. My knickers are soaked. But, there were too many other people, other eyes, to really do anything else,” Rose sighed. “Lily’s parents told me they intercepted my father at the front doors. They said they had to have Hagrid help them restrain him.”

“Your parents went through so much, Rose,” Julian said tenderly. “And a lot of it was Draco Malfoy’s fault. Most people have come to terms with it now. The Malfoys are again a well-respected and prominent family. But, your folks, particularly your father, will probably never forget. You should owl your mother. Actually, you should probably ask her to come here so you can talk directly to her. How’s her pregnancy coming along?”

Rose kissed his cheek and rested her head on his shoulder again. “Well, her morning sickness is finally over she says. I have to admit, that’s one part of childbearing I’m really not looking forward to. Yes, you’re right. I’ll ask her to come here so we can talk face-to-face.”

“Well, I wouldn’t mind being the one that gets you into the, shall we say, childbearing situation,” Julian said with his best leer.

Rose blushed and smacked his arm. “You’re a dirty, old wizard, Julian Corner. Be nice and patient with Lily, will you? She’s only just turned thirteen. She has some real emotional issues with her, well, her sexuality right now. Promise?”

“Of course I will,” Julian said, getting up and offering her his hand. “I really like her, Rose, I want to assure you of that.”

Rose actually gave him a short, soft kiss. “I know you do. Treat her right, and, well, who knows? You might get lucky one day.”

She went to the stairs for the girls’ dorms, turned and grinned, “Who knows? Be nice enough to her and you might even get lucky with me one day.”

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Why be normal?

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from: lunalovepotter
date: Apr. 4th, 2008 04:21 am (UTC)
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Rather than comment on all three parts, I figured I'd save some space and comment at the end. That was a lot of fun, and very creative. I especially enjoyed the playful interaction between Harry and Ginny. I love how they just can't keep their hands off each other, like they're randy teenagers!

Like you I think that Lily is underused in fan fiction. She's one of my favorites, so I was pleased to see her character showcased here as well. Thanks for writing this! :)

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obsession called while you were out

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from: flyingcarpet
date: Apr. 6th, 2008 02:45 am (UTC)
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Very cute. You did a great job bringing in all the supporting epilogue characters. :) I'm so glad you were able to join in the fest!

One thing I would suggest, though, is including a link at the end of part 1 to part 2 and so on -- it might make it simpler for easily-confused readers like myself. :)

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pettybureaucrat

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from: pettybureaucrat
date: Apr. 7th, 2008 12:28 pm (UTC)
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Thanks for the nice comments. I'm still kind of fumbling with all the technical details of LJ, but I'll remember from now on.

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.:dʒemi: such a constant little thing:.

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from: eimajunknown
date: Apr. 10th, 2008 05:13 pm (UTC)
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that was fun. i like the way you developed all these extra characters and added some of your own.

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pettybureaucrat

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from: pettybureaucrat
date: Apr. 10th, 2008 07:54 pm (UTC)
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Thanks for the kind words. I'm probably going to write more about Lily and her friends. So much attention has been focused on Rose and Scorpius, or Albus and Scorpius, that Lily seems to have been shunted aside.

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